There was a time when things were different. You remember – don’t you???
It all happened in college. I was walking on campus with my girlfriend and you shouted something at us.
We turned.
Your colorfully bright shirt triggered a blinding glare. The sun bounced off the crimson fiery shades naturally worn by my pet Macaw. Red was your color. A sizzling burning cloak you wore so well.
What happened to our heated passion?
The days you when nothing and no one could come between us.
I’m standing before you and can’t understand your venom.
We’d grown apart.
Yes.
The days of growing old together were a distant memory.
I never wanted it to be like this.
I can’t keep myself from remembering those campus days.
When did it change?
When did we change?
I could see your eyes were filled with hatred as you walked away.
You swore revenge.
You shouted, “An eye for an eye”, while an outstretched arm mimicked a sword.
There was malice in your voice.
I knew we had slowly drifted apart.
How could you hold such rancor and bitterness for what had become so clear?
The resplendent love that emanated from us used to make the whole world go blind.
The dying embers of our love have, now, gone out.
When we kissed and parted that night, I knew, we would never meet again.
You walked away.
I was left with my cloak of memories.
Copyright 2014 © written by Isadora
Fiction Short Story written for this challenge.
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The Speak Easy at Yeah Write has challenged us to write.
Your piece must include the following sentence as the FIRST line: “There was a time
when things were different.”
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- Your post must be dated February 2, 2013, or later.
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February 18, 2014 at 7:56 pm
Dear Issy,
You have captured a complicated dynamic so perfectly and so concisely–like a haiku. I feel the pain and sorrow and confusion in this story. Well done!
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February 19, 2014 at 4:36 am
Your comment is uplifting for me since it is coming from someone with great knowledge for
the craft of writing. I am smiling and taking in your very complimentary and kind
comment. Thank you, Naomi, so very much.
Issy
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February 23, 2014 at 12:29 am
It is definitely my pleasure, Issy!
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February 16, 2014 at 5:36 am
Love is rustproof. Love which rusts soon is not a love but worst than hate.
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February 17, 2014 at 10:28 am
A thoughtful comment with poetic tones. It’s true if rust forms in the beginning
of a relationship than what hope is there?
Thanks for stopping by and commenting. It’s greatly appreciated.
Isadora
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February 17, 2014 at 11:35 am
Thanks Isadora ma’m for your comments.
Regards
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February 7, 2014 at 5:30 am
So beautiful and yet so sad. Love can be so complicated when you’re young. 😀
Well written Issy. 😀 *hugs*
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February 7, 2014 at 4:16 pm
I wish complications occurred for the young only but, sadly, it can hit at any age.
Sometimes, the longer people are in a relationship the more vindictive they become.
This story was based on many experiences I’ve had with friends and family going
through the Bid D.
I’m happy you thought it was a worthy write.
XO
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February 7, 2014 at 12:09 am
Young love leaves a permanent mark in our hearts. You captured that very well 🙂
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February 7, 2014 at 4:18 pm
I wish complications occurred for the young only but, sadly, it can hit at any age.
Sometimes, the longer people are in a relationship the more vindictive they become.
This story was based on many experiences I’ve had with friends and family going
through the Bid D.
I’m happy you thought it was a worthy write.
Thank you, Obed Madina, for stopping by my blog and reading my entry.
Isadora
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February 6, 2014 at 7:22 pm
Ah, young love. So passionate and so quick…definitely reminds me of my college days.
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February 7, 2014 at 4:21 pm
Ahhh , yes, young love can be complicated and inexperienced.
But, there are be hurtful anger at breaking up at any age. It’s so sad.
Glad you enjoyed, S.J.Paige, my entry for the challenge. I appreciate
your visit very much.
Isadora
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February 6, 2014 at 7:12 pm
The brighter the fire, the worse it burns. You did such a good job capturing the pain that can come with the end of a relationship. Nicely done!
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February 7, 2014 at 4:23 pm
The intensity of love during those first days can slowly diminish.
Your kind words fill my heart with joy. Thank you, Suzanne, for stopping by.
Isadora
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February 6, 2014 at 3:06 pm
Without a closure,all ex relationships continue to haunt and hurt.The saddest of all is when love becomes sour and worst turns into hate!Feel so sorry for the girl!You brought out her anguish well 🙂
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February 6, 2014 at 3:33 pm
Your comment and visit to my blog is greatly appreciated.
I have had many friends go through these ugly divorces.
It’s always difficult and painful. Glad you enjoyed this entry to the challenge.
Thanks for the positive review.
Isadora
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February 6, 2014 at 3:40 pm
Yes,any break up is terrible and in a divorce,if there are kids involved,it is worse.In India,fortunately divorce is still not so prevalent ,maybe because of the long drawn court cases and that the support system re family and such-is still strong but slowly thgs are changing ,and at least in the
urban areas,we can see it rearing its ugly head
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February 6, 2014 at 5:16 pm
I didn’t know the divorce rate was climbing in the urban areas. It seems that because we are living longer our lives change so much so we eventually don’t have as many things in common. Perhaps, the religious and cultural traditions change too. Still, I feel people should be considerate of the other person they are divorcing, after all, it would be wrong to be dishonest within a marriage.. It’s a blessings to find someone who can fulfill your life.
It’s a pleasure to meet you. I hope to return to your blog and read many of your wonderful stories.
Isadora
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February 6, 2014 at 5:20 pm
So true and I cannot agree more with you on that -ppl should be considerate-what hurts and is wrong for one,cannot be good for the other too,no?Thank you for the kind words -will look forward to seeing you again,God Bless,xx
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February 6, 2014 at 1:11 pm
A sad story … but you met the challenge well!
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February 6, 2014 at 2:56 pm
Thank you so much for enjoying my story and letting me know in
your comment that I met the challenge. I enjoy writing challenges.
~~~~~~~~~ : – )
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February 6, 2014 at 11:39 am
I just watched old friends endure a nasty divorce and this rang very true in light of that. Remembering how passionately in love they were, it was shocking to watch their loathing playing out in nasty ways. You’ve captured that experience very well.
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February 6, 2014 at 2:59 pm
Yes .. divorce can be difficult and nasty. I’ve watched quite a few
that weren’t pretty. I’ve been married 48 years so I had to dig into
the memories of what my experiences were with people whose marriages
I had been to but were now failed.
Thanks for stopping by and leaving your insightful comment.
Isadora
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February 6, 2014 at 10:15 am
That was very powerful writing. I could feel the emotions. I love the way you incorporated the photo prompt as well. Best wishes, Zainab
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February 6, 2014 at 3:01 pm
I am so very appreciative of your lovely comment on my entry for
the challenge. Thank you for stopping by and visiting and commenting.
Isadoraa
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February 6, 2014 at 3:51 am
The demise of a relationship is always painful. I wonder if walking away sooner would’ve alleviated some of the bitterness…
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February 6, 2014 at 3:36 pm
Break-ups are all so complex. Many of my friends have experienced these
painful endings. Because I’ve been married for 48 years, it was challenging
to write about this but fascinating to attempt.
Thanks for the visit and comment. ~~~~ : – )
Isadora
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February 5, 2014 at 9:15 pm
What a poignant piece!
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February 6, 2014 at 3:36 pm
Super grateful for your complimentary comment.
Thanks !!!!
Isadora
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February 5, 2014 at 8:13 pm
We all have our heartbreak memories, Issy. You’ve written this with such emotion and feeling, that it really rings true.
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February 6, 2014 at 3:28 pm
I’ve had friends go through these horrific break-ups. It’s so sad.
I often wondered how they could forget the way they felt at the beginning
of their relationship. Since I’ve been married 48 years, I had to dig deep
into the world of others.
Thanks for the visit, Sylvia. I always enjoy seeing your comments.
Issy xo
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February 5, 2014 at 12:20 pm
Sometimes loves sad like that… good job!
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February 5, 2014 at 6:19 pm
Yes, indeed, it can be. I love writing about love.
Happy or sad it doesn’t matter. I’m a hopeless when
it comes to love.
I’m very happy you enjoyed my short little fiction.
Thanks for stopping by and leaving your very nice comment.
Isadora
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February 5, 2014 at 11:28 am
I loved reading,it had so much emotion.
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February 5, 2014 at 6:26 pm
Truly appreciate your lovely comment. Thanks for visiting.
Isadora
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February 5, 2014 at 9:11 am
The past sometimes destroys the future.
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February 5, 2014 at 6:20 pm
El Amor …. so complicated. But… what would life be without it?
Thanks for stopping by and visiting.
Isadora
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February 5, 2014 at 7:41 am
Desperately sad Issy but well written.
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February 5, 2014 at 6:22 pm
Ahhh … El Amor … so complex. I always enjoy writing about it.
I love the challenge of going into the various struggles it can
bring many. BUT … what would life be without AMOR ???
Thank you dear friend … you always make me smile.
Namaste xoxo
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