Inside the Mind of Isadora

Friday Fictioneers – The Lie

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The lawn chairs were rapidly filling spaces on the grass.

Shari looked down and focused on her book. She was hoping to disappear.
Maybe, no one would notice her. She hadn’t wanted to attend the concert.

“People will ask about you”, Bart raged. He was adamant about her going.
The seething fury in his eyes said it all.

She was startled back by a syrupy voice.

“Are you excited about Bart’s solo tonight? Marjorie asked.

“Sure she is”, Kathy mimicked Marjorie’s syrupy Southern drawl.
“Did you break your arm Shari, dear?”

“The dog,” Shari said meekly. “The dog tripped me”.

2015©isadoradelavega

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Genre – Fiction
Word Count – 100
PHOTO PROMPT – ©davidstewart

The challenge is to write a story in 100 words – beginning, middle and end.

Hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields – to join in click here

Author: Inside the Mind of Isadora

Intriguing, sensitive, mysterious, loving, artistic and crackling with excitement for life is a pretty good description of who I am. I just retired from the world of art where I sold my Artfully Designed Handmade Jewelry for 28 years; although, art will always be a part of whom I am no matter what venue I choose to express it.

33 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – The Lie

  1. Sharp fiction. Looking forward to checking out your website. Happy Easter.

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  2. A great take on a difficult topic. Nice work.
    KT

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  3. Domestic violence ..A topic many sweep under the rug. Its good it’s brought to the open by good stories like this!

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    • Thank you so much for the very complimentary words. ❤
      I believe there are too many stories in the news lately about this.
      For example, a man doused his wife with gasoline and set her on fire. I know that's harsh to write to you about but it was my inspiration for writing about domestic violence. So sad ..!!!

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  4. Very sad, though a clever take on the prompt. Hope she can get shot of him soon. Nice writing too.

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  5. Well told. I can’t imagine what goes through a woman’s head when she’s trapped – or feels trapped – in a relationship like this. Kudos.

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    • Fear … plain old fear. It’s the only thing they see, feel and know. It’s the reason they stay. They can’t imagine
      other options. Sadly, we need to teach our girls to walk away because love shouldn’t physically or emotionally hurt.
      Thank you for popping in and leaving your very insightful comment. I appreciate your kind words. 😎

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  6. This just make me furious at Bart.. Hope he chokes on a tuba..

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    • hahaha … I think Bart could look too good with that tuba down his throat.
      I think a couple of shots to his eyes and a huge gunshot to the chest.
      Oh my …. now I’ve done it. : )
      This story is based on stories of people I’ve known. They’re always sad and helpless situations.
      They can’t seem to see a way out. I’m pleased my story stirred you but it’s fiction with a sprinkle of reality.
      Thank, Bjorn, for popping in and leaving your great comment. 😎

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  7. Dear Isadora,

    The fear of being alone, the fear of the unknown, the fear of being unloved, the fear of rejection, the fear… God damn the fear. I believed my mother when she told me she’d fallen down the stairs to the garage when I was young. It wasn’t until I saw my father hit her that I finally understood. Despite those experiences I will never be able to walk a mile in her shoes or Shari’s shoes, but I try.

    I have nothing but contempt for a man that would hit a woman and nothing but love and empathy for a woman in Shari’s position.

    Your story was excellent and heartfelt and will help to spread the word. One day, perhaps when women finally collectively leave them, men will learn. Outstanding work with this piece.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    • Dear Doug,

      Yes … it’s the fear. Especially, woman who don’t have a foundation for making a living. They wonder how they’ll make it.
      My response has been slow to your comment because your story is my story. I never knew my Mom was being abused. I
      knew there was WW II going on every night. I knew there were issues and constant over-the-top fights. Heck, my Mom
      was known as Super Woman because the doors were constantly being ripped off the hinges. I don’t really know or can I say who was the true abuser. They were both insanely violent. But, I do know my mother has black eyes and bruises but my dad had them too. I think they were both very angry, sad and miserable people yet behaved like all was okay but it wasn’t. I suppose they thought we were naive enough to think it was a happy Father knows Best family. It wasn’t.
      Thank you for sharing your insightful thoughts and for appeciating my story that doesn’t even begin to showcase the thoughts I have on this subject.

      Adios,
      Isadora

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  8. Dear Isadora,

    Shari needs to disappear…from that relationship. Honestly, I don’t think you need to end with “another lie.” It’s obviously a lie. 😉 There’s tense confusion with “no one will notice her.” I think “would” would work better…Aside from those nitpicky issues you tell an all too true story. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • Hola Rochelle,
      Would you believe I had ‘would’ and changed it after I had posted it? I do that a lot. Like when you take an exam and just before you hand in your paper you change your answers – that’s me. It’s back to the original. Thank you for nitpicking. I don’t mind at all. 😊
      I wondered about those 2 last words – “Another lie” – but to be honest, I needed 2 more words to get to 100. I’m going to try to find a place for 2 more words and delete that. 😳
      Thank you for visiting and commenting on my story. 🌺 There are a great many woman that need to disappear from these
      types of relationships.
      Adios,
      Isadora 😎

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  9. A very well told short story, Issy. I really feel for Shari.

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  10. Gripping writing, Isadora. 🌻

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  11. Oooh, VERY well done – loved the story.

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  12. OOH…that Bart – let me at-em. We’ve all known a Bart. You clearly have fiction in your blood.

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    • There have been a great many Bart’s in the lives of some friends of mine. The names have been changed
      to protect the innocent. ; ( No matter how they’re treated they just put up with it. Frustrating to
      watch and demeaning to the woman. I’ll be right by your side if there’s a rally. 😍

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  13. A powerful story well told, on a topic that needs to be addressed, Izzy.

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  14. Oh no, she needs help fast.

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  15. Sad that so many women find themselves in these situations…

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  16. Excellent! A poignant scene of domestic abuse being pushed under the rug and the abuser sadly being protected.

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