Mother was furious and mumbling to herself. She did that when she was angry.
She turned to PJ and me in the back seat.
“Did you hear what the man said? The carousel is closed. He didn’t say why.
An hours drive wasted. No griping or tears on the way home.”
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Good Evening – this is Audra Smith
Breaking News …
Two children found murdered at the Suffolk Park Carousel.
The light dust of snow preserved the bodies and evidence.
Police have a suspect in mind but no one’s been apprehended.
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Silent tears flowed down Mothers’ face as she hugged us tightly.
2015©isadora delavega
Genre: Fiction
Word Count: 100 Words
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July 28, 2015 at 2:31 pm
Wow! Sad and gripping, all in one. Well done!
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July 29, 2015 at 3:32 am
I hadn’t thought about the story too much. It just flowed as I wrote it. Thank you !!!!
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July 31, 2015 at 10:11 pm
You’re always welcome!
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July 28, 2015 at 10:58 am
Close to danger and an escape. It was so fortunate they were’t also victims. No wonder the mother was overcome with emotion. Well written, IMI. ——- Suzanne
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July 29, 2015 at 3:39 am
I’m happy you enjoyed the direction my story took. I thought the Mothers emotions spoke volumes.
Thank you, Suzanne, for appreciating my writing and leaving your very nice comment. _______ Isadora 😎
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July 27, 2015 at 10:53 am
To my friend thank you for visiting my blog have a nice new week
a big hug from Herluf.
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July 28, 2015 at 4:39 am
Awesome video … Interesting choice for the story. Thank you stopping by and inspiring dialog. 😍
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July 27, 2015 at 2:54 am
Definitely a paradigm shift on this one! I think all mothers would find themselves feeling like this mother did…
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July 29, 2015 at 3:44 am
The emotions the Mother showed spoke volumes. Her kids may not have known what they were but she did.
Yes, I too believe that Mothers can have a bad day they sometimes regret. Thank you, Dale, for your wonderful
comment and visit ________ Isadora 😎
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July 29, 2015 at 4:06 am
Absolutely! We all have our moments! Makes us human…
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July 27, 2015 at 12:07 am
Quite the range of emotions!
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July 28, 2015 at 4:42 am
Ranging as emotional as the writer. To write is to dig deep into the crevices of the emotions. There is no deeper depth. Glad the story touched the inner emotions of the commentator. Thank you for your comment and visit. 😊
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July 26, 2015 at 10:36 pm
Love the idea of different scenes in so short a story. Truly effective writing, Izzy! 🙂
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July 28, 2015 at 4:44 am
I can see no greater comment than the reader seeing the writers mind at play creating a story worthy of a visual image. 😀
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July 26, 2015 at 10:01 pm
Great story, very poignant.
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July 28, 2015 at 4:46 am
Indeed a story worth recognizing in its entirety. Thank you !!! 😋
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July 26, 2015 at 8:04 pm
Recently I was over at the carousel by the San Diego Zoo. One of the information pamphlets there stated that there are more carousels in San Diego County than any other place in the world. Along with the Zoo carousel, there’s one at Safari Park and there are two located in two different malls. That’s four. Sadly, the pamphlet didn’t tell me how many so I shall continue to search for any others.
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July 29, 2015 at 4:10 am
We have a carousel in a mall in Bradenton, Florida. I was amazed when I saw it. It was a reminder of those wonderful times when I rode the carousel as a child. Unfortunately, my story had a little less joy in it.
Thanks for stopping by and leaving your very interesting comment. ________ Isadora 😎
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July 26, 2015 at 6:14 pm
Wow! That’s quite a story and in so few words. Well done, Issy. 🙂
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July 29, 2015 at 3:47 am
It’s difficult to pare down the words to 100 and get a good story written. I’m enjoying th challenge of it as I do
tend to add a great many words. This is good discipline. I’m happy your liked my story, Sylvia. Thnak You !!! 😎
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July 26, 2015 at 2:55 pm
It is said every culprit leaves an evidence as so did this one. Hope he is booked.
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July 29, 2015 at 3:49 am
Since it’s fiction, I never got that far with the story. But, if he left evidence the possibility of him getting caught is very high. I’m happy you enjoyed my story. Thank You !!! ____ Isadora 😎
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July 26, 2015 at 9:40 am
I can imagine this too vividly, very well written Issy!
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July 28, 2015 at 4:49 am
Unfortunately, a tale that plays put out in news shows more times than we’d like to see. Society it is a changing.
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July 26, 2015 at 4:03 am
A powerful story about life and death. And the way fate intervenes.
Well written!
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July 29, 2015 at 4:05 am
Yes, and the reality the mother was feeling about the close encounter.
Thank you so much for your very positive comment and for visiting. _____ Isadora 😎
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August 1, 2015 at 6:16 pm
You are more than welcome.
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July 26, 2015 at 3:27 am
Very chilling. To think that we had an almost brush with death, and that we were spared.
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July 29, 2015 at 4:03 am
I think the Mothers emotional reaction brought her bad day guilt to light. We all have them. She was overcome
by the reality she heard on the news. Glad you enjoyed my story enough to leave a comment on your visit.
Thank you ________ Isadora 😎
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July 26, 2015 at 2:30 am
Wonderful story line – very powerful
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July 29, 2015 at 3:59 am
Unfortunately, something that seems to be happening too often.
Thank you for stopping by, Tina. Your visit and comment is always welcome.
Isadora 😎
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July 25, 2015 at 11:22 pm
Love it.
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July 28, 2015 at 4:50 am
Thank you so much. I appreciate the comment and visit. 😊
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July 25, 2015 at 10:14 pm
Hola Isadora,
A newscast like that has a way of reminding us what we have. One nitpick “an hour’s drive” you need an apostrophe.
Good one.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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July 29, 2015 at 3:57 am
Hola Rochelle,
The apostrophe has been added. No problem on pointig it out. I am here to learn. Advice is always appreciated.
Mothers have bad day’s. In the story, the mother is showcasing her guilt for having had that bad day.
Thank you for visiting and commenting.
Adios,
Isadora 😎
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July 25, 2015 at 9:06 pm
Very nice! If I heard news like that from a place I was just about to take my kids, I would be hugging them tightly too. Great story!
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July 29, 2015 at 3:52 am
The Mothers emotions spoke volumes. Many mothers go through frustrations with their children. In this case, she displayed her guilt with her emotions. I’m very grateful you enjoyed my take on the story prompt. Thank You !!! 😎
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July 29, 2015 at 3:54 am
My pleasure!
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July 25, 2015 at 6:08 pm
I have written a song called The Carousel’ and how kids luv ’em,, great As kids we would have griped..
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July 28, 2015 at 4:53 am
I’d love to here that song, Gerry. You tube is the way to go. Sounds like carousels played a big part in your formative years. Play … Play … Play the song. 😍😍😍
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July 25, 2015 at 5:26 pm
Nicely done. I think mother said no griping instead of gripping. 🙂
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July 25, 2015 at 5:50 pm
Thank you for pointing that spelling error to me. I corrected it.
I appreciate all help and comments left for me here. 😀
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July 25, 2015 at 7:29 pm
You are most welcome. I enjoy your stories.
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