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Friday Fictioneers – Narnia Adventure

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Friday Fictioneers - Dec 4 - roger-bultot-2                                                                                    Photo Prompt by Roger Bultot

Narnia Adventure

“Hello, Mrs. Benson.”

“Hi Peter. What’re you boys up to do today?”

“Just a little hiking.”

“Be sure, to come home before dark.”

“Okay, Mom.”

**********

Outside, Peter tugged Andy’s arm.

“What’s the rush?”

“I found the wardrobe. We can experience what happened in Narnia.”

“Ugh … it stinks in here.”

**********

“We’re so sorry, Mrs. Benson.”

Her body wrenched.

“Officers, it can’t be. They’re good boys. Who’d do this to them?”

“The abandoned lot is a druggy hangout. They must’ve stumbled across a
strung out junky. It looks like they found a sword among the rubble..”

“It’s the weapon the killer used.”

2015©Isadora DeLaVega

Genre: Crime Flash Fiction
Word Count: 100

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*****    The Lion, the Witch and the Wardrobe is a high fantasy novel for children by C. S. Lewis, published by Geoffrey Bles in 1950. It was the first published of seven novels in The Chronicles of Narnia (1950–1956) and the best known; among all the author’s books it is the most widely held in libraries. Although it was written as well as published first in the series, it is volume two in recent editions, which are sequenced according to Narnia history (the first being The Magician’s Nephew). Like the others, it was illustrated by Pauline Baynes, and her work has been retained in many later editions.
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Author: Inside the Mind of Isadora

Intriguing, sensitive, mysterious, loving, artistic and crackling with excitement for life is a pretty good description of who I am. I just retired from the world of art where I sold my Artfully Designed Handmade Jewelry for 28 years; although, art will always be a part of whom I am no matter what venue I choose to express it.

39 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – Narnia Adventure

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  2. nice twist…super…thanks for nice post

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  3. A chilling detour from the magic of Narnia, Isadora. Packs a punch in those final lines!

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  4. A grim twist on the Narnia story. Well told.

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  5. NOT what I was looking for! Wow!

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  6. Well that didn’t go where I had hoped, ditto Peter, I’m sure. Definitely prefer C.S.Lewis’ version!
    If you’ll forgive a little comment, I was a bit confused by Peter calling her “Mrs Benson” and then “Mom” in the first section. Re-reading I think she must be Andy’s Mom and it’s him speaking that line, so I got there in the end and I know the limit would have made it hard to add an attribution or two to clear that up.

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    • We can’t conceive of such a twist if we’ve read Narnia – right? I prefer the original too.
      But, we’re supposed to imagine something with the photo prompt and Narnia came to mind instantly.
      My youngest daughter(now 38) adored the book. We talked about it at dinner all the time.
      I don’t mind the critique at all. I welcome it. I had the same confusion when I read it back for editing. I would change
      a word here and there and still have your same question. Finally, I gave up as I was altering it too much and nothing was making
      sense. Can that happen?
      Yes, You have it right. She is Andy’s Mom. I was trying to show that Andy was a polite and nice little boy by having him answer his
      Mom. When I tried to eliminate that line it seemed like he was being rude. Anyway, as you mentioned in your comment, the word limit
      was on my mind the entire time too.
      I’m pleased you were able to see who was who. Thank you for stopping by and leaving your very nice comment and critiquing.
      Isadora 😎

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  7. Not exactly the happy ending they were looking for… well done! 🙂

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  8. Oh, this is so tragic. Even more for the fact they never experienced the real adventure.

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  9. I love a good twist in the tale, Issy. Well done. 🙂

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  10. Oh no! Innocence totally lost. How sad. Remember when we used to be able to play and not worry about such dangers?

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  11. Got a pain in my neck from the rapid twist this took!
    Really well done! Definitely not a Wardrobe after all…

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  12. What a horrible twist. The boys’ love for adventure is so realistic, great writing.

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  13. A heart wrenching tale Isadora. A great story and well done.

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  14. Querida Isadora,

    What a grisly twist. I was expecting magic not murder. Muy bien, amiga.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • Querida Rochelle,
      I read your comment quickly (I’m always excited to see what you have to say about my stories) and had to laugh.
      I thought grisly was gristle. LOLOL Hope you had a good laugh too ???!!!
      My mind goes to strange places when I first see the photo. I go by my first reaction. I will stick with the Narnia tales.
      Gracias y Shalom,
      Isadora 😎

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  15. That took a dark twist! Well done.

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  16. Alas Narnia might be wonderful, but it was also a dangerous place to hang out at.

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  17. Well you certainly turned that one on its head. Not what I was expecting from a Narnia tale… Well done.

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  18. A powerful and cautionary tale Issy, I think I’ll stick with Narnia.

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