Inside the Mind of Isadora

Friday Fictioneers – On A Dark Night

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He sat in the lamp-lit kitchen waiting.

He’d made a cup of tea for her; a morning ritual after her long night at work.

Worry increased as daylight appeared.

~~~~~~~

“It’s hauntingly dark,” she heard a voice from behind her say.

She found herself being shoved against her car.

“How come you’re out so late, honey? What do you do?”

Her hand slashed the silver blade across his throat.

Gurgles of blood oozed while he shrieked.

Inside the car, she flung the scalpel onto the floor.

As she drove away, she watched his writhing body.

“I’m a surgeon,” she said.

2016©Isadora De La Vega

Genre: Flash Fiction
Word Count: 100

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Author: Inside the Mind of Isadora

Intriguing, sensitive, mysterious, loving, artistic and crackling with excitement for life is a pretty good description of who I am. I just retired from the world of art where I sold my Artfully Designed Handmade Jewelry for 28 years; although, art will always be a part of whom I am no matter what venue I choose to express it.

41 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – On A Dark Night

  1. Thanks for one’s marvelous posting! I quite enjoyed reading it, you might be a great author.
    I will remember to bookmark your blog and definitely will come back very soon.
    I want to encourage you to continue your great job,
    have a nice afternoon!

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  2. Great story, Isadora.. He picked on the wrong person that time. Good writing. 🙂 — Suzanne

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    • I thought it would be a little different to show a more secure woman that could handle a dangerous
      situations such as that. I’m pleased you agreed, Suzanne. It’s a situation happening a lot on campuses.
      I wanted to show that women can be empowered if they are prepared. Thani you for visiting and for your comment.
      Isadora 😎

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  3. I like the contrast of her husband and tea and her swift reaction with the scalpel. Nice way to build tension.

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  4. Oh, he definitely chose the wrong woman.Seems we both killed a character with a blade this week. Thank goodness there’s tea and a good man waiting at home.

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    • hehe … yes, we did spill a bit of blood in this FF challenge. : )
      A strong woman who would not be taken by a crud. I added a good husband to showcase the opposite.
      I’m pleased you picked that up. Thank you for enjoying my story enough to leave a comment.
      I really do apprecaite it.
      Isadora 😎

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  5. Ha! Killer last line!
    Take that scum bag!

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  6. “… and I steal the hospitals’s surgery instruments.” Interesting moral arguments raised here. I’m sure a jury would find her innocent.

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    • Well, I just have to ask, Patrick – Why do you think she stole the scalpel? I’ve seen them at flea markets and medical stores. As a surgeon, she could probably purchase one easily. I chose it, rather than a knife, because it’s small and fits in a woman’s hand. It’s a situation that could go either way with a jury. No witnesses.
      Thanks for the dialog. It’s always great to have the opinions of others with these FF stories. Ya’ll come back real soon …
      Isadora 😎

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  7. Interesting story! I knew something was coming for her, but the scalpel and surgeon were a surprise. From US bias medical practitioner bias (I’m a PA), I wondered why she took the scalpel? If crime is that big a problem, a scalpel is not a great tool compared with other knives a surgeon would also wield well. And then there’s the mess… neck wounds are particularly bloody. There’s no way to do a frontal cut and not get covered.
    My medical nitpicks aside, I like your tension and action sequences! Poor hubby, waiting up for her…

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    • Thank you for the detailed comment, Sara. I learn from the critiques of my stories.
      Guilty as charged. I have no knowledge about the medical profession. Well, except for the illnesses I have. In that case, I’m an expert. : )
      Although a knife might have been better, I thought a scalpel was small and sharp but maybe it isn’t.
      I was going for drama rather than accuracy. If I was writing a novel I would have done a ton of research. With the limit of 100 words,my direction was to create the scene with a powerful punch added for a dramatic effect.
      I didn’t write about her clothing being soaked or other details because of the word limit. For sure, she’d be covered in blood. In addition, I didn’t say she was on her way to the police station and that she called for an ambulance but her husband waiting and seeing the light of day was a clue.
      I appreciate the dialog. It helps to hone writing skills and is what we should be writing when we leave a comment.
      Again, Thank You for visiting my blog and leaving your comment.
      Isadora 😎

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  8. A surgeon with a damn fine eye and a deadly hand! Great take on the prompt – took the reader in a totally unexpected direction. Great stuff

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  9. I love both parts of your story, Issy. So glad the woman was able to defend herself. Her husband had no idea of what was going on whilst he was anxiously waiting.

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  10. She forgot the surgeons oath,

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  11. He picked the wrong lady that time!

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    • Women need to be prepared for dangerous situations. We don’t always work the daylight hours.
      Yes, perhaps a bit extreme but with 100 words I left the reader wondering.
      Did she report it?
      Did she call for medical assistance as she drove away?
      Was she driving to the police station?
      Oh my … a story that coudl go on and on with todays world.
      Thank you, Gilly. It’s always aplesure to se you here and your comments.
      Isadora 😎

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  12. Ooh… chilling, Isadora. But good!

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    • Thank you, Tom. I’m sure my mind is going into that Halloween mode. 👻
      The macabre surfacing. Have a wonderful weekend. The weather is great
      here – down to the high 70’s from high 90’s with non-humid breezes.
      Paradise has returned. 🌈
      Isadora 😎

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  13. That’s small but perfectly formed

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  14. Good lesson. Don’t mess with surgeons.

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  15. Querida Isadora,

    This made me cringe and laugh at the same time. She’s a woman who knows how to defend herself. She’ll have quite a story to tell her husband. Although there’s the honest part of me that hopes she called the police to file a report. Buen trabajo, amiga.

    Abrazos y shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • Querida Rochelle,
      Actually, it didn’t come across but she was late in getting home because she
      drove to the police station … or … maybe, it may be that she’s a vampire that has surgeon skills. LOL
      Gracias mi amiga … que pases un buen fin de semana. 🌸
      Isadora 😎

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