He sat in the lamp-lit kitchen waiting.
He’d made a cup of tea for her; a morning ritual after her long night at work.
Worry increased as daylight appeared.
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“It’s hauntingly dark,” she heard a voice from behind her say.
She found herself being shoved against her car.
“How come you’re out so late, honey? What do you do?”
Her hand slashed the silver blade across his throat.
Gurgles of blood oozed while he shrieked.
Inside the car, she flung the scalpel onto the floor.
As she drove away, she watched his writhing body.
“I’m a surgeon,” she said.
2016©Isadora De La Vega
Genre: Flash Fiction
Word Count: 100
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January 19, 2017 at 3:11 am
Thanks for one’s marvelous posting! I quite enjoyed reading it, you might be a great author.
I will remember to bookmark your blog and definitely will come back very soon.
I want to encourage you to continue your great job,
have a nice afternoon!
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October 20, 2016 at 12:00 pm
Great story, Isadora.. He picked on the wrong person that time. Good writing. 🙂 — Suzanne
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October 20, 2016 at 2:56 pm
I thought it would be a little different to show a more secure woman that could handle a dangerous
situations such as that. I’m pleased you agreed, Suzanne. It’s a situation happening a lot on campuses.
I wanted to show that women can be empowered if they are prepared. Thani you for visiting and for your comment.
Isadora 😎
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October 19, 2016 at 10:26 am
I like the contrast of her husband and tea and her swift reaction with the scalpel. Nice way to build tension.
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October 19, 2016 at 11:14 am
I’m pleased you were able to see the contrast of characters between the husband and this crud of an attacker.
Thank you for that. I wanted drama in this story. I think you saw that too.
I appreciate your stopping by and commenting.
Isadora 😎
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October 19, 2016 at 1:58 pm
You are welcome. 🙂
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October 19, 2016 at 7:10 pm
😎
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October 19, 2016 at 4:38 am
Oh, he definitely chose the wrong woman.Seems we both killed a character with a blade this week. Thank goodness there’s tea and a good man waiting at home.
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October 19, 2016 at 11:11 am
hehe … yes, we did spill a bit of blood in this FF challenge. : )
A strong woman who would not be taken by a crud. I added a good husband to showcase the opposite.
I’m pleased you picked that up. Thank you for enjoying my story enough to leave a comment.
I really do apprecaite it.
Isadora 😎
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October 18, 2016 at 2:00 pm
Ha! Killer last line!
Take that scum bag!
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October 18, 2016 at 10:00 pm
Thank you, Dawn. Rockin’ comment – I’m right there with you on feelings about this character.
Isadora 😎
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October 17, 2016 at 7:34 am
“… and I steal the hospitals’s surgery instruments.” Interesting moral arguments raised here. I’m sure a jury would find her innocent.
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October 17, 2016 at 1:49 pm
Well, I just have to ask, Patrick – Why do you think she stole the scalpel? I’ve seen them at flea markets and medical stores. As a surgeon, she could probably purchase one easily. I chose it, rather than a knife, because it’s small and fits in a woman’s hand. It’s a situation that could go either way with a jury. No witnesses.
Thanks for the dialog. It’s always great to have the opinions of others with these FF stories. Ya’ll come back real soon …
Isadora 😎
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October 17, 2016 at 12:25 am
Interesting story! I knew something was coming for her, but the scalpel and surgeon were a surprise. From US bias medical practitioner bias (I’m a PA), I wondered why she took the scalpel? If crime is that big a problem, a scalpel is not a great tool compared with other knives a surgeon would also wield well. And then there’s the mess… neck wounds are particularly bloody. There’s no way to do a frontal cut and not get covered.
My medical nitpicks aside, I like your tension and action sequences! Poor hubby, waiting up for her…
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October 17, 2016 at 2:05 pm
Thank you for the detailed comment, Sara. I learn from the critiques of my stories.
Guilty as charged. I have no knowledge about the medical profession. Well, except for the illnesses I have. In that case, I’m an expert. : )
Although a knife might have been better, I thought a scalpel was small and sharp but maybe it isn’t.
I was going for drama rather than accuracy. If I was writing a novel I would have done a ton of research. With the limit of 100 words,my direction was to create the scene with a powerful punch added for a dramatic effect.
I didn’t write about her clothing being soaked or other details because of the word limit. For sure, she’d be covered in blood. In addition, I didn’t say she was on her way to the police station and that she called for an ambulance but her husband waiting and seeing the light of day was a clue.
I appreciate the dialog. It helps to hone writing skills and is what we should be writing when we leave a comment.
Again, Thank You for visiting my blog and leaving your comment.
Isadora 😎
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October 16, 2016 at 3:10 pm
A surgeon with a damn fine eye and a deadly hand! Great take on the prompt – took the reader in a totally unexpected direction. Great stuff
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October 16, 2016 at 6:29 pm
I greatly appreciate your very complimentary comment, Lynn. I’m pleased you found it to be great. I’m enjoying the photo prompt challenges and all of the talented writers.
Thank you for visiting, come back again real soon.
Isadora 😎
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October 17, 2016 at 10:45 am
My pleasure Isadora. Photo prompts are great and a brilliant way to practice writing too 🙂
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October 17, 2016 at 1:51 pm
I agree. Photo prompts help tremendously with writing skills.
The critiques help hone the discipline to write better.
Isadora 😎
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October 17, 2016 at 4:18 pm
Very true and Friday Fictioneers is a corker. The writers are of such high quality.
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October 17, 2016 at 4:51 pm
They are truly high quality. One can learn a great deal from their writing. 😎
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October 17, 2016 at 4:52 pm
I have been doing, I hope 🙂 A really talented bunch and very supportive too.
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October 16, 2016 at 11:47 am
I love both parts of your story, Issy. So glad the woman was able to defend herself. Her husband had no idea of what was going on whilst he was anxiously waiting.
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October 16, 2016 at 6:32 pm
It’s a scary world out there. Women need to be prepared for dangerous situations. This may have been an extreme incident for my story but it’s happening more and more especially on campuses. Thank you your wonderful comment, Sylvia.
Isadora 😎
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October 15, 2016 at 8:19 pm
She forgot the surgeons oath,
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October 15, 2016 at 8:35 pm
With her life in danger, I think she was thinking survival. But, her surgeon skills came in handy. A bit macabre; however,
in this day and age too realistic. Thank you, Michael Humphris, or stopping by and leaving a comment.
Isadora 😎
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October 15, 2016 at 4:14 pm
He picked the wrong lady that time!
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October 15, 2016 at 8:39 pm
Women need to be prepared for dangerous situations. We don’t always work the daylight hours.
Yes, perhaps a bit extreme but with 100 words I left the reader wondering.
Did she report it?
Did she call for medical assistance as she drove away?
Was she driving to the police station?
Oh my … a story that coudl go on and on with todays world.
Thank you, Gilly. It’s always aplesure to se you here and your comments.
Isadora 😎
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October 15, 2016 at 11:07 am
Ooh… chilling, Isadora. But good!
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October 15, 2016 at 1:55 pm
Thank you, Tom. I’m sure my mind is going into that Halloween mode. 👻
The macabre surfacing. Have a wonderful weekend. The weather is great
here – down to the high 70’s from high 90’s with non-humid breezes.
Paradise has returned. 🌈
Isadora 😎
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October 15, 2016 at 8:29 am
That’s small but perfectly formed
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October 15, 2016 at 1:58 pm
I appreciate your stopping by Neil Macdon and leaving your comment.
It’s always difficult to get everything into 100 words.
But, I’m trying to hone my skills.
Thank you …
Isadora 😎
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October 15, 2016 at 6:31 am
Good lesson. Don’t mess with surgeons.
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October 15, 2016 at 1:51 pm
I suppose it’s a good idea to be prepared for what could happen on a dark night.
Thank you, Indira, for stopping by and commenting.
Isadora 😎
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October 15, 2016 at 3:20 pm
She was very prepared! Most unexpected.
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October 15, 2016 at 7:47 pm
She may have saved herself from great harm. A bit extreme but given the situation – who knows…???
Thank you for reading my challenge story. I’m happy you visited my blog and left a comment.
Isadora 😎
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October 16, 2016 at 5:04 am
You are right dear.
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October 14, 2016 at 10:31 pm
Querida Isadora,
This made me cringe and laugh at the same time. She’s a woman who knows how to defend herself. She’ll have quite a story to tell her husband. Although there’s the honest part of me that hopes she called the police to file a report. Buen trabajo, amiga.
Abrazos y shalom,
Rochelle
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October 15, 2016 at 2:03 pm
Querida Rochelle,
Actually, it didn’t come across but she was late in getting home because she
drove to the police station … or … maybe, it may be that she’s a vampire that has surgeon skills. LOL
Gracias mi amiga … que pases un buen fin de semana. 🌸
Isadora 😎
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October 14, 2016 at 10:23 pm
Ouch.
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October 15, 2016 at 1:50 pm
It’s okay, he was a bad guy. His intentions weren’t good.
Thank you for visiting and commenting.
Isadora 😎
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