Inside the Mind of Isadora

Friday Fictioneers – He Rocked

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“Look, I’ve a magical wand,” Willie said.
“No, you don’t. It’s a piece of rope”.

He always found odd objects to store in those cubicles dad made for him.

~~~~~

Mom rocked in her chair and stared; disconnected. It all started when she was told Willie was retarded.

She screamed, “No. You’re wrong.”

They weren’t.

He was.

She was angry. She took him out of school.

Blame.

He listened to music all day. Rocked his head, side to side, on his bed listening to his portable radio.

She told him he was special.

At 14, he raped her; unaware, she was his mother.

2016©Isadora DeLaVega

Genre: Flash Fiction
Word Count: 102 words

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Author: Inside the Mind of Isadora

Intriguing, sensitive, mysterious, loving, artistic and crackling with excitement for life is a pretty good description of who I am. I just retired from the world of art where I sold my Artfully Designed Handmade Jewelry for 28 years; although, art will always be a part of whom I am no matter what venue I choose to express it.

36 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – He Rocked

  1. Wow Isadora intense. I’m sure that would be difficult dealing, but maybe school was a safer place for him? Or I hate to say it, but an institution? He needs to learn things, even if he is mentally only able to learn so much. And he needs to know right and wrong, so he doesn’t hurt someone, not knowing it’s hurting. Maybe they need to help him stay safe and help is family stay safe somehow? Tough one.

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  2. Shook me down to my curled toes! Wow. That’s some writing, Isadora!

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  3. Queirda Isadora,

    Disturbingly compelling. This left me wanting to know more and wanting to run the other direction at the same time. Very well done. 2 words? What 2 words? As I’ve said, 30 or more over I’d find irritating. 😉

    Shalom y abrazos,

    Rochelle

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    • Querida Rochelle,
      I plan on writing the whole story down. I’ve got a bunch of pages done.
      It’s a difficult write. I knew the family. I changed a lot into flash fiction.
      It’s a tragedy on all levels.
      Yes … those 2 words bugged me. I’m a super rule follower.
      Thank you for understanding I could cut anymore and for your wonderful comment.
      Adios y Besitos,
      Isadora 😎.

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  4. Oh my, it hit me like a train. What a story! It has greater impact because of that innocent beginning, masterfully done.

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    • Please don’t send me the hospital bill. ha ha
      I’m pleased you found the story to be impactful. I was trying to add the prompt in some way.
      I added the beginning for that reason. I altered it for flash fiction and to protect the innocents in the family.
      Thank you for leaving a wonderful comment.
      Isadora 😎

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  5. Wow, that last line hits hard. Tragic story, very well written.

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  6. Chilling and sad, how could you still love your child after that…

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    • Thanks for leaving the url. I popped over. Good story … it posted me as ‘Curlytop’. The account
      isn’t synched to here. : – o
      I like to have a shocker in all of my FF challenges. Sometimes, it works. Sometimes, not so much. : – )
      Isadora 😎

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  7. Wow, that was brutal and a surprise. The fact that you wrote it in distant third person lessened the impact because we’re remote from the characters. Did you do that deliberately?

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    • Sadly, it’s a true story that I’ve fictionalized in many ways. I didn’t want to offend or expose the family.
      I’m writing the entire story in a crime fiction book. Scraping out pages one at a time. 🙄
      Yes, I was trying to be the story teller. Did it work? I’m treading on new waters with that style.
      Happy to see you visiting, Neil. Thank you for your wonderful comment. SMILING ….
      Isadora 😎

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  8. Lordy! The road you took us down!!! Well done!

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  9. Can the crime be allowed in the circumstances?
    This little story has SO many threads, many cul-de-sacs and several possible outcomes.
    It’s doing my head in…

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  10. Very sad story Isadora. Very well done!

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  11. Such a sad and quite awful tale, if you don’t mind me saying, Isadora, but well written in so few words. At the beginning I had no idea I would end up at the end!

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    • I don’t mind your comment at all, Tom. It’s an awful tale. It’s a true story that I’ve fictionalized.
      I won’t mention whose true story in order to preserve privacy. One never knows what goes on
      behind a homes front door. 😟
      Actually, I went over the limit by 2 words. I just couldn’t shave it down anymore.
      Have a wonderful week ….
      Isadora 😎

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