“Look, I’ve a magical wand,” Willie said.
“No, you don’t. It’s a piece of rope”.
He always found odd objects to store in those cubicles dad made for him.
~~~~~
Mom rocked in her chair and stared; disconnected. It all started when she was told Willie was retarded.
She screamed, “No. You’re wrong.”
They weren’t.
He was.
She was angry. She took him out of school.
Blame.
He listened to music all day. Rocked his head, side to side, on his bed listening to his portable radio.
She told him he was special.
At 14, he raped her; unaware, she was his mother.
2016©Isadora DeLaVega
Genre: Flash Fiction
Word Count: 102 words
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October 30, 2016 at 1:33 am
Wow Isadora intense. I’m sure that would be difficult dealing, but maybe school was a safer place for him? Or I hate to say it, but an institution? He needs to learn things, even if he is mentally only able to learn so much. And he needs to know right and wrong, so he doesn’t hurt someone, not knowing it’s hurting. Maybe they need to help him stay safe and help is family stay safe somehow? Tough one.
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October 31, 2016 at 3:36 pm
Hi Mandibelle
Thank you for the dialog and great suggestions.
The family I’ve written about have passed on. It’s the reason I can write about it.
I’ve got more to tell. I’m putting together a book or story shorts about this and other stories I’ve written.
It’s a process I’m learning about as I write. The answers to your questions and suggestions will be addressed then.
Your visits and comments are always a pleasure.
Isadora 😎
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October 31, 2016 at 5:09 pm
Thanks Isadora.
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October 27, 2016 at 4:12 am
Shook me down to my curled toes! Wow. That’s some writing, Isadora!
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October 31, 2016 at 3:30 pm
Hi Dawn,
Just catching up … sorry : (
Thank you for the high compliments in your comment.
I truly appreciate it. My face is lit up with joy.
Isadora 😎
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October 25, 2016 at 8:24 pm
Queirda Isadora,
Disturbingly compelling. This left me wanting to know more and wanting to run the other direction at the same time. Very well done. 2 words? What 2 words? As I’ve said, 30 or more over I’d find irritating. 😉
Shalom y abrazos,
Rochelle
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October 26, 2016 at 6:06 pm
Querida Rochelle,
I plan on writing the whole story down. I’ve got a bunch of pages done.
It’s a difficult write. I knew the family. I changed a lot into flash fiction.
It’s a tragedy on all levels.
Yes … those 2 words bugged me. I’m a super rule follower.
Thank you for understanding I could cut anymore and for your wonderful comment.
Adios y Besitos,
Isadora 😎.
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October 25, 2016 at 7:55 pm
Oh my, it hit me like a train. What a story! It has greater impact because of that innocent beginning, masterfully done.
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October 26, 2016 at 6:01 pm
Please don’t send me the hospital bill. ha ha
I’m pleased you found the story to be impactful. I was trying to add the prompt in some way.
I added the beginning for that reason. I altered it for flash fiction and to protect the innocents in the family.
Thank you for leaving a wonderful comment.
Isadora 😎
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October 24, 2016 at 10:06 pm
Wow, that last line hits hard. Tragic story, very well written.
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October 26, 2016 at 5:58 pm
I’m super glad you liked this tragic story. It’s actually a true one with loads of fiction to protect the innocent.
Thank you …
Isadora 😎
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October 24, 2016 at 6:54 pm
Chilling and sad, how could you still love your child after that…
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October 24, 2016 at 7:20 pm
Stayed tuned … for when I continue. You’ll be surprised and which way it goes.
Thank you, Bjorn, for your spot on comment.
Isadora 😎
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October 24, 2016 at 5:20 pm
that was a shocker, totally took by surprise
http://obliqview.blogspot.in/2016/10/the-spoils-prompt-clairefuller-every.html
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October 24, 2016 at 6:41 pm
Thanks for leaving the url. I popped over. Good story … it posted me as ‘Curlytop’. The account
isn’t synched to here. : – o
I like to have a shocker in all of my FF challenges. Sometimes, it works. Sometimes, not so much. : – )
Isadora 😎
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October 24, 2016 at 4:06 pm
Wow, that was brutal and a surprise. The fact that you wrote it in distant third person lessened the impact because we’re remote from the characters. Did you do that deliberately?
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October 24, 2016 at 6:38 pm
Sadly, it’s a true story that I’ve fictionalized in many ways. I didn’t want to offend or expose the family.
I’m writing the entire story in a crime fiction book. Scraping out pages one at a time. 🙄
Yes, I was trying to be the story teller. Did it work? I’m treading on new waters with that style.
Happy to see you visiting, Neil. Thank you for your wonderful comment. SMILING ….
Isadora 😎
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October 24, 2016 at 7:05 pm
As I said, by using a distant third person, you distanced me from the characters. A closer point of view that takes inside the character’s head might have more emotional punch
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October 24, 2016 at 7:18 pm
WOW … I see what you’re saying. I’ll keep that in mind. I appreciate your fine critique, Neil Macdon.
I love FF … the guidance is immeasurable. Thank you very, very much.
Isadora 😎
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October 24, 2016 at 2:58 pm
Lordy! The road you took us down!!! Well done!
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October 24, 2016 at 3:27 pm
Good Monday Morning, Dale ….
I’m digging into the mind of Isadora. There’s so many things in there.
They’re not all sweet and peaceful.
It’s a book I’m writing. I’m researching laws and writing.
YUP … it’s a fictionalized crime story but with many true incidences.
I’m keeping it fiction to salvage the privacy of the family.
I’m super happy you enjoyed it enough to leave a comment.
Have a wonderful week ..
Isadora 😎
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October 24, 2016 at 3:29 pm
So exciting for you!!! And us, the ones who will read it .
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October 24, 2016 at 4:01 pm
I sure hope so. I’m in the beginning stages. Crawling my way page by page.
I appreciate your kind words … Thank you. 😎
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October 24, 2016 at 2:43 pm
Can the crime be allowed in the circumstances?
This little story has SO many threads, many cul-de-sacs and several possible outcomes.
It’s doing my head in…
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October 24, 2016 at 3:23 pm
It’s a book I’m writing. I’m researching the question you’ve asked.
YUP … it’s a fictionalized crime story but with many true incidences.
I’m keeping it fiction to salvage the privacy of the family.
I’m glad it has had an impact. I appreciate your great comment and visit.
Have a wonderful week …
Isadora 😎
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October 24, 2016 at 3:24 pm
Sounds very interesting…
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October 24, 2016 at 3:28 pm
😎
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October 24, 2016 at 2:11 pm
Very sad story Isadora. Very well done!
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October 24, 2016 at 2:42 pm
I know it’s a powerfully sad and shocking story, PJ. It’s part of a book I’m writing.
I always appreciate your visiting and commenting. Have a fantastic week.
Isadora 😎
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October 24, 2016 at 6:56 pm
I am sure it will be a very good book!
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October 24, 2016 at 6:58 pm
😎
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October 24, 2016 at 11:12 am
disturbing. sad
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October 24, 2016 at 2:41 pm
The horrors that go on behind the front door of homes.
Thank you for commenting. I appreciate it very much.
Isadora 😎
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October 24, 2016 at 9:07 am
Such a sad and quite awful tale, if you don’t mind me saying, Isadora, but well written in so few words. At the beginning I had no idea I would end up at the end!
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October 24, 2016 at 2:39 pm
I don’t mind your comment at all, Tom. It’s an awful tale. It’s a true story that I’ve fictionalized.
I won’t mention whose true story in order to preserve privacy. One never knows what goes on
behind a homes front door. 😟
Actually, I went over the limit by 2 words. I just couldn’t shave it down anymore.
Have a wonderful week ….
Isadora 😎
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October 25, 2016 at 1:15 am
I wondered if it was based on something you knew…very disturbing. It certainly struck me–hard to read that ending, changing very much from the beginning.
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