“Por favor, Renaldo, can we stop all of this practicing. My feet are swollen. My toes ache.”
“Esmeralda, we must practice if we’re going to win the competition.”
“But, it’s snowing and I wish to go home while I still can.”
“The Flamenco has to be perfect; no missteps, we must be flawless.”
“Okay, go, he snarled. Work on your costume and return early tomorrow. No excuses.”
Cautiously, Esmeralda, walked to her car.
From behind she heard a scream.
Quickly, she turned and saw Renaldo sitting on the icy concrete.
With a sheepish grin, she shouted, “No practice tomorrow … right?”
2017©Isadora DeLaVega
Genre: Flash Fiction
Word Count: 100 words
Photo Prompt:©Magaly Guerrero
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April 29, 2017 at 2:48 am
Ouch! There goes the training for the next session. Nice one.
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April 29, 2017 at 12:11 pm
I think they’ll be fine. Renaldo just wants everything perfect. I’m glad you enjoyed my story.
Thank you … Isadora 😎
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April 26, 2017 at 7:59 am
Hah, that’ll teach him. Not so graceful on the ice!
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April 27, 2017 at 12:08 am
HA HA … no he’s not an ice skater. He is a perfectionist and has been shown what pain feels like.
Thank you for visiting and commenting.
Isadora 😎
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April 26, 2017 at 3:24 am
Muy doloroso! Really enjoyed your story, and couldn’t help smiling at Esmeralda’s remark at the end.
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April 27, 2017 at 12:04 am
I wasn’t sure where I was going with the story. I surprised myself when it gave me a chuckle as I read it back.
Thank you, Magarisa, for reading, commenting and enjoying.
Isadora 😎
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April 27, 2017 at 1:37 am
Con mucho gusto!
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April 26, 2017 at 1:08 am
I am sure Esmeralda must have been cursing him. And i hope she didnt overdo it or they will miss the performance too 😀 An enjoyable tale and well told.
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April 27, 2017 at 12:06 am
HA HA … KArma at play – perhaps? I chuckled when I read it back after I wrote it.
It wasn’t meant to be funny but I was glad it took the route. Thank you, Dahlia, for visiting and commenting.
Isadora 😎
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April 25, 2017 at 11:06 pm
One shouldn’t laugh at someone’s downfall, but I couldn’t suppress a smile. 😅
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April 27, 2017 at 12:01 am
There’s something about seeing someone fall that’s brings out a chuckle in all of us.
I laughed too after I wrote it. : ) Glad you enjoyed, Sylvia. Thanks …
Isadora 😎
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April 27, 2017 at 4:28 pm
Absolutely! I’ll never forget when our rather rotund science teacher skidded up on an icy patch in the school playground. Fortunately he didn’t break anything, but it took four of the 6th form boys to get him upright again. 😆
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April 28, 2017 at 4:03 pm
: ) Great reminder, for me, as to why I moved to Florida. Too many falls on slippery ice. : )
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April 24, 2017 at 9:16 pm
Oh my..let’s hope he recovers.
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April 25, 2017 at 8:02 pm
I think Renaldo’s ego was much more bruised. : )
Thanks …
Isadora 😎
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April 24, 2017 at 2:10 pm
Yes… practice makes perfect but over practice makes injuries… poor Renaldo (not!)
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April 25, 2017 at 8:01 pm
Practice in dance is grueling but it’s the only way to get it right.
Renaldo is a perfectionist. I ‘d like to think he meant well.
Thanks, Dale for reading and commenting.
Isadora 😎
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April 23, 2017 at 5:52 pm
Should I say, well deserved? Ha Ha! Well written. Loved this funny tale.
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April 25, 2017 at 8:00 pm
Well, I think Renaldo is a perfectionist. Can’t blame a man for trying to get something right. LOL
Thank you for commenting.
Isadora 😎
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April 25, 2017 at 8:04 pm
Ha Ha! True. Cheers!
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April 23, 2017 at 12:43 pm
Is it mean to say this gave me a chuckle! Shouldn’t be arrogant — often comes back to bite! LOL! 😀
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April 25, 2017 at 7:59 pm
Absolutely not. A good fall always brings on a laugh. Then, of course, concern.
But, I think Renaldo’s ego is much more bruised then his b–t. Thank you, Linda, for coming by and commenting.
Isadora 😎
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April 23, 2017 at 9:01 am
Esmerelda is off the hook for a few days at least! Good story.
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April 25, 2017 at 7:16 pm
Thank you Claire for visit and comment. I think Esmeralda could use a little time off.
I had a fun time writing about them.
Isadora 😎
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April 23, 2017 at 8:53 am
A nice bit of comedy, this made me laugh although I hope he’s not too injured and they can still participate
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April 22, 2017 at 11:47 pm
This made me laugh. Great story!
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April 23, 2017 at 1:48 am
Thank you, Amie. I glad my story made you laugh. It was funny to think of Renaldo on the ground.
Isadora 😎
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April 22, 2017 at 1:46 pm
On the one hand, I’m happy Esmeralda gets a break. But I remember injuring my ankle and not being able to bellydance for weeks and it was so frustrating! For anyone as passionate about the art as Renaldo, this has got to be a quite aggravating. Fun story.
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April 22, 2017 at 5:53 pm
Yes, I agree with you. As a former dancer, I can remember many minor foot fractures from overstraining.
Belly Dance: the only form of dance I never tried. Now, my hips would be too achy to try. : )
I’m pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for visiting and commenting.
Isadora 😎
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April 21, 2017 at 10:01 pm
Nice funny take. lol.
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April 22, 2017 at 5:51 pm
Thank you, Indira. I’m happy you enjoyed reading my story.
Isadora 😎
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April 23, 2017 at 4:31 am
🙂
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April 21, 2017 at 10:46 am
Let’s hope the only thing bruised was his pride, although a lot of people wind up in the hospital from falling on ice.
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April 21, 2017 at 7:23 pm
Falling on ice isn’t the only way to wind up in the hospital. Falling at an older age can happen often. At times, deadly.
Bones don’t heal well or at all and other issues come up too. This was a tongue-in-cheek story of my days as a dancer.
The grueling practices and schedules were tough. But, you have to be tough to be a winner. Besides, dancers love, love,
love to dance no matter how much their feet hurt. Even @ my age I adore dancing. Thanks for stopping by RG.
Have a great weekend …
Isadora 😎
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April 21, 2017 at 7:31 pm
I bet you are a great dancer too. 🙂
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April 21, 2017 at 7:33 pm
😄 I’ll be modest and just say, “I can cut a rug.” 😄
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April 20, 2017 at 11:22 pm
funny 🙂
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April 21, 2017 at 7:14 pm
I’m pleased you enjoyed my fun story.
Thank you,
Isadora 😎
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April 20, 2017 at 6:06 pm
Perhaps if HE had to wear the heels . . .. Then again, dancing to win does take practice, practice , practice. Nice take on the prompt ~ great conversation.
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April 21, 2017 at 7:18 pm
HA HA … that is so true. Heels must have been invented by the same man who invented the mammogram machine. LOLOL
Actually, in Flamenco dancing the men wear a heeled shoe for the clicking. As a former dancer for many years, I can atest
to the brutal practice sessions. But, when you win it is all worth it. Anyway, dancers love, love, love to dance no matter how much their feet hurt.
Glad you enjoyed my little story. Thank you …
Isadora 😎
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April 20, 2017 at 4:56 pm
Beautifully written. The guy got his just rewards, it seems.
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April 20, 2017 at 6:05 pm
Thank you, Neel. I’m glad you enjoyed my take on the prompt.
Nice to see you here.
Isadora 😎
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April 20, 2017 at 2:54 pm
Well, that will teach him. Dedication is good and all, even great… but one must never sacrifice common sense.
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April 20, 2017 at 6:04 pm
HI Magaly,
As a former dancer, I can tell you teachers or choreographers will work you until you fall
right before a competition. But, Renaldo got his when he fell. I’m happy you enjoyed my take on your photograph.
Thank you,
Isadora 😎
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April 20, 2017 at 7:20 am
I see he got his come-uppance. Or down-ance. Good take, Isadora.
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April 20, 2017 at 6:01 pm
HA HA … down-ance is right. Thanks for commenting, Sandra.
I’m glad you enjoyed.
Isadora 😎
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April 20, 2017 at 1:31 am
🙂 Nicely twisted, Issy, so to speak.
janet
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April 20, 2017 at 4:52 am
HA HA … Renaldo is a bit under the weather. 😹
I’m happy you enjoyed, Janet. Thanks …
Isadora 😎
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April 19, 2017 at 10:47 pm
Just is just. But I hope she does not miss out
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April 20, 2017 at 4:54 am
Me too, Michael. One never knows where the contest winner could wind up.
Isadora 😎
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April 19, 2017 at 10:38 pm
Poor Renaldo. That’ll teach him to practice too much!
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April 20, 2017 at 4:55 am
I suppose his legs gave out from under him. LOLOL : )
Thanks for popping in, Iain.
Isadora 😎
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April 19, 2017 at 10:29 pm
Querida Isadora,
The last line made me laugh out loud. Creo que Renaldo aprendió una lección de humilidad. ¿De veres? I enjoyed this.
Abrazos y Shalom,
Rochelle
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April 20, 2017 at 4:58 am
Renaldo is officially on the ground and trying to maintain his dignity. LOLOL
I had a bit of fun with this one. Shoes??? Really??? I did what I could mi amiga …. lo que pude hacer.
Gracias y muy agradecida siempre …
Isadora 😎
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