The subway doors opened. People poured off the train like swarms of ants.
Milagros rushed to get to her job. She hadn’t eaten and felt faint. She was late but needed to eat something. Her stomach growled as she ordered coffee and bagel in an out-of-breath voice.
“To go?”, the barista asked.
“Yes,” she said impatiently.
Panic took over the hunger pangs as she searched for her wallet.
Gone.
This can’t be happening.
From behind she heard, “Is this yours?”
“Yes!!!”
“It was on the floor”.
“I can’t thank you enough”
Sure you can, How ‘bout a date?”
2017©Isadora DeLaVega
Word Count: 100
Genre: Flash Fiction
Photo Prompt: Marie Gail Stratford
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November 13, 2017 at 9:14 am
Ooh I definitely want a follow up to this one Isadora!
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November 18, 2017 at 6:01 pm
I’m back from a quiet respite. I do hope to write this little story into something more.
I know it will surely have a few twists and turns. Thank you, Louise, for the high praise.
Isadora 😎
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November 12, 2017 at 5:30 pm
I wonder if he asks too much… better just to smile and say it’s OK… maybe may I share my coffee with you…
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November 12, 2017 at 6:44 pm
Those are all good ways to approach someone but what if this is the first time he’s seen her
and doesn’t want to lose touch. Ahhhh …. dating can be difficult for some. I’m happy I’m not
in that zone. Hey … thanks, Bjorn, for the great comment.
Isadora 😎
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November 10, 2017 at 5:05 pm
I refuse to look at this cynically… Must be because I, myself, am in the first stages of love… And why not? There are no limits to how we can meet, are there?
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November 10, 2017 at 6:36 pm
BRAVO, Dale. As a hopeless romantic, I’d like to believe he’s a nice guy who thought this young woman
was attractive and, maybe, hopefully available for dating. YUP … we all have to meet our mates somewhere. Work, activity, party …
or school: like me. I hope you’re having a wonderful time with your new amour. LOVE is grand. We all need and wish for it.
All the best, Dale. Hope you’re weekend is a super one.
Issy 😎
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November 10, 2017 at 6:51 pm
Gracias, Issy!
Met mine at work… after a year and a half on the dating sites… he was right there! 😁
Hope yours is as well!
Dale 🌻
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November 11, 2017 at 3:20 pm
Mmmmm … missed the comment. 😳
Sometimes, things that are right in front of us are not seen. I wish you a kind and gentle loving spirit
to travel with you on your journey through hearts connecting hearts.
Have a glorious restful weekend.
Issy 🙏🏻
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November 11, 2017 at 3:59 pm
Please. No worries.
And thank You. So very sweet of you 😘
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November 10, 2017 at 1:07 am
Because there is so much in the news about sexual predators these days, that’s how I read this piece. Whatever your intention, I enjoyed how you interpreted the picture. Very glad you’re back. Alicia
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November 10, 2017 at 6:30 pm
When I started writing my story I had no idea where it was going to go. I went from saleswoman to historic Bloomingdales building
to time issues. Finally, it all came together as a somewhat romance. But, I felt my ending gave it a sinister skeptical twist.
I always go round and round because of the brief 100 words we’re allowed. I’m happy you enjoyed it, Alicia,
and I appreciate you welcoming me back. Have a super weekend.
Isadora 😎
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November 10, 2017 at 12:45 am
Nice romance or is he a creepy pick pocket that wants more.
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November 10, 2017 at 6:25 pm
Originally, I was going for a frazzled workday. Then, a guy appeared in my head.
I hope he didn’t pickpocket mind to that direction. Glad you enjoyed Irene.
Thank you for commenting and visiting.
Isadora 😎
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November 9, 2017 at 9:26 pm
Nice twist that I didn’t see coming!
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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November 10, 2017 at 6:24 pm
Thank you for enjoying my story and for visiting.
Isadora 😎
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November 9, 2017 at 6:56 pm
Dear Isadora,
Love – definitely love. But Milagros could be a little careful. “Call me. Midday. Here’s my cell phone number…”
They’ll have a story to tell their grandchildren, won’t they?
Best wishes
Penny
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November 9, 2017 at 6:59 pm
Since the dating scene is so different from when I was dating back in the late 60’s, my imagination could go wild from the stories my daughters and grandkids tell me. Thanks for the encouragement and positive vibes.
Isadora 😎
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November 9, 2017 at 4:44 pm
Cool little snapshot of how it can really happen. This would be a great opening for a romantic movie 🙂
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November 9, 2017 at 6:40 pm
I’m pleased you were able to pick that up. As a hopeless romantic, I’ve been toying with the idea of a short romance story.
I’d had this is my files for awhile. The photo brough it to light. I think it might be time to expand on it.
Thank you for visiting and leaving your lovely positive comment.
Isadora 😎
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November 9, 2017 at 3:37 pm
I would have to guess that the man in your lovely tale has either found his” love at first sight” or is something of a dangerous being. Of course, I would like the first guess to be true.
Beautifully written.
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November 9, 2017 at 3:46 pm
I was going for a frustrated start of her day when I began writing the story. It morphed into
a helpful person to make her feel life isn’t all that bad. Then, when I finished the story, it
sounded like he could be a purse thief. I think I would rather have him be a good guy admiring a pretty lady.
Glad you enjoyed my story, Moon. Thanks for visiting and commenting.
Isadora 😎
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November 9, 2017 at 2:43 pm
Great story, Issy!
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November 9, 2017 at 3:47 pm
Thanks PJ. Glad you liked it.
Issy 😎
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November 9, 2017 at 11:14 am
Tell me he didn’t steal it from her pocket, or is that the cynic in me?
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November 9, 2017 at 3:52 pm
You brought a smile to my face, Sandra. I started the story with the concept that she was having a hectic start to her day.
As I was writing, it morphed into more drama for her with a knight in shining armor saving the day. Then, after I finished
the story, it seemed like he could have stolen her wallet while she was distracted. I think I’d prefer to have him be a good
looking guy talking to a frazzled good looking gal and connecting. BUT …. I could go the other way too. MMmmmm …. something
to think about. Thanks for the dialog ….
Isadora 😎
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November 9, 2017 at 10:08 am
Love is the air – even if the coffee’s on the floor! Nice one.
Click to read my FriFic!
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November 9, 2017 at 3:54 pm
Or a wallet laying in full view … maybe. Or a pickpocket trying to twist his actions into a good deed.
Mmmmmm …. could go either way. Glad you enjoyed, Keith. Thanks …
Isadora 😎
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November 9, 2017 at 9:42 am
I hope she learns to slow down. I hope he’s okay too… he could be the one to slow her down
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November 9, 2017 at 6:48 pm
The story is totally fiction except for the rushing and hurrying part. When I was in my 20’s I worked in the Manhattan, New York
Wall Street District. It was a struggle everyday to get to work on time. A real nightmare ….
I think I’d like to believe they found love. But, on further inspection of my story I got the feeling he could have been up to no good.
Mmmmm … I may have to go back and write a longer version. Thanks for visiting and leaving your wonderful comment, Laurie.
Isadora 😎
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November 9, 2017 at 6:48 am
Ahh they could go a long way together ❤
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November 9, 2017 at 6:43 pm
I’m a hopeless romantic, Gilly. I’d like to think they found a love with each other.
I may expand this into a short romance story as it has a few twist that can make for an interesting write.
As always …. thanks 😍
Issy 😎
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November 9, 2017 at 4:15 am
I LOVE THIS ISADORA! Such a nice way to write a story and with a hopefully happy ending. Very cute indeed!
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November 9, 2017 at 3:58 pm
I’d like to thin that it’s a knight in shining armor saving the day for Milagros.
After I’d finished writing the story it seemed that it could go another way. He could have been a pickpocket.
YIKES … I’m a romantic, I’ll go with LOVE found at a coffee shop. ~~~ : – )
Glad you loved my story, Nan. Thank you …
Isadora 😎
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November 9, 2017 at 4:07 am
And they lived together happily ever after. I like this story.
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November 9, 2017 at 4:13 pm
The romantic in me wants them to be a happily ever after couple.
But, when I reread my story before posting, he could be interpreted as a pickpocket.
Nah …. they found LOVE.
Isadora 😎
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November 9, 2017 at 8:34 pm
My wife and I love and laughed together after reading your last sentence in your reply. “Nah …. they found LOVE.”
We like it.
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November 9, 2017 at 12:08 am
My pessimistic nature says don’t trust this guy.
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November 9, 2017 at 4:11 pm
When I’d finished the story and read it, I felt he could be a pickpocket.
But, let’s stay positive and call it romance. : ) Thanks, Susan, for visiting and commenting.
Isadora 😎
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November 8, 2017 at 11:33 pm
That had a happier ending than I expected. The start of a long lasting romance I hope.
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November 9, 2017 at 4:01 pm
I’m happy you saw a happy ending, Iain. I wasn’t sure how to go with it.
When I finished and read the story back, I felt he could have been a pickpocket.
The romantic in me says no. He’s a good guy and saw a pretty lady he wanted to take on a date.
Isadora 😎
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November 8, 2017 at 10:05 pm
She might not be in such great emotional shape at the moment. Maybe he could just call her later.
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November 9, 2017 at 4:05 pm
Although the story is totally fiction, the train ride and lateness was a bit of my own drama when I had to get to work in Manhattan’s Wall Street district. It was a zoo everyday. Anyway, After I read the finished story, I got the feeling this guy could have been a pickpocket. Mmmmm …. NY
and all that goes with it. Glad you found the story to be a good read, James. Thank you …
Isadora 😎
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November 9, 2017 at 4:12 pm
I’ve lived in San Francisco and near Los Angeles in the past and that’s busy and crowded enough for me. Can’t imagine commuting to Wall Street everyday.
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November 9, 2017 at 6:52 pm
It was a long time ago but I still can feel the chaos all around me if I’m in a crowd.
It’s hustle and butsle and everyone has to be somewhere … like yesterday.
Now, I live in a sleepy little fishing town in Florida and love every quiet minute. Thanks …. 😎
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November 8, 2017 at 10:02 pm
Querida Isadora,
I hope this means that things are looking up for Milagros and this isn’t some creep of a stalker. Bien escrito.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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November 9, 2017 at 4:09 pm
Querida Rochelle,
I was going light this week. I thought I’d showcase a little of my frustration of traveling to Manhattan years ago.
Althought the story is totally fiction, I remember trying to get to my Wall Street Distric job. NY subways
can be brutal. The romantic in me wants it to be a LOVE connection but when I finished reading it, I thought,
he could be a pickpocket. Mmmmm … I think there’s more story in this one. Gracias mi amiga ….
Isadora 😎
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November 9, 2017 at 4:13 pm
Oooh…I can think of different directions this could go. Remind me to tell you about how I dropped my passport in the airport in Frankfurt on the way to Israel. 😉
Shalom,
Rochelle
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November 9, 2017 at 6:53 pm
Please? Tell us?
It sounds fascinating!
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November 9, 2017 at 7:00 pm
I plan to give tis one a life. Thanks 😎
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November 9, 2017 at 6:55 pm
Oh no …. I can’t imagine. I know I’d be having an anxiety attack. : (
YUP … I think I may expand this one into some kind of romance short story with lots of twists and turns.
Do tell …???!!!
Abrazos mi amiga,
Isadora
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