The sun gleamed on the table.
Mrs. Goodman cleaned her home and windows all the time; a cleaning cloth always in her hand.
Ella and I played on the floor with our barbie dolls. If we didn’t wake William, we could have candy. The colorful candy was tempting. I couldn’t believe Ella never took one.
When Ella left to get her dollhouse, Mr. Goodman walked into the room.
He was tall, thin with a chalky wry face.
“Do you like candy?” he asked.
I just stared.
He pointed to his zipper saying, “I have candy, if you’d like.”
I froze.
2019©Isadora DeLaVega
Genre: Flash Fiction
Word Count: 100
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January 16, 2019 at 5:20 pm
Ick. I hope he gets caught and locked up for a long time.
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January 16, 2019 at 5:50 pm
Ditto on the ‘Ick’ … and creepy. Some redators are caught others aren’t. Sad, for sure. Thanks for commenting.
Isadora 😎
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January 16, 2019 at 5:31 am
Ugh
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January 16, 2019 at 5:02 pm
Exactly 👍 with sprinkles of creepy 😳
Thanks, Dawn.
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January 15, 2019 at 9:37 pm
Oh, goodness. Creepy man.
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January 16, 2019 at 12:08 am
There are many lurking in the shadows. Hopefully, parents are vigilantly making their children aware of them. Thank you, Sascha.
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January 15, 2019 at 9:14 pm
Oh my goodness, that was so unexpectedly sinister and chilling! Well done.
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January 16, 2019 at 12:09 am
Sadly, a local news program showed a map of predators in a 5 mile area, it was astounding to see the amount that were living in that location.
Grim …. !!! Thank you for visiting and leaving your comment.
Isadora 😎
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January 15, 2019 at 8:41 pm
Disgusting! Well done, Isadora!
These creeps don’t ever give up. In my later 20’s, I cut through a neighbour’s yard. The door flew open, and the friendly very old guy who lived there was shaking a box of chocolates. The back lighting only added to the creepiness, as he shook the box and called out, “want some candy little girl?”
I laughed in his face, and called him a sick pervert!
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January 16, 2019 at 12:25 am
YIKES … it’s good that you were able to leave quickly and not be lured into his trap.
It’s a grim and revolting subject. More and more is being said about it. I believe the #metoo movement has given
women and even children more confidence.
Thank you for sharing you terror experience and for leaving a comment, Resa.
Isadora 😎
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January 15, 2019 at 7:14 pm
Oh Isadora that’s horrible and very hard hitting. The last line is a killer, well done
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January 15, 2019 at 9:01 pm
Thank you, Michael. It’s a creepy subject. I appreciate your very favorable comment.
Isadora 😎
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January 15, 2019 at 5:43 am
Candy never seemed so creepy. Excellent story telling, Isadora.
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January 15, 2019 at 6:06 pm
Sadly, it can be a form in which these predators lure young children.
It’s a creepy group of men, that ‘s for sure.
Thank you or commenting, Fatima. I appreciate your visit.
Isadora 😎
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January 14, 2019 at 9:22 pm
Now we know why you never want to wake William. What a sicko. I hope he gets caught before any damage is done.
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January 14, 2019 at 10:08 pm
‘Sicko’ describes the predator perfectly. Sadly, vicitms suffer all of their lives. It’s a scar they always feel. Thank you for commenting, Russell. This is a subject that has come to life more now that the #metoo movement voice is being heard.
Isadora 😎
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January 14, 2019 at 6:49 pm
Chilling , disturbing and too close to home for many. Didn’t see it coming…
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January 14, 2019 at 7:26 pm
It’s a horrible topic. Sadly .. too many are left with scars.
Thanks you for commenting and visiting.
Isadora 😎
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January 14, 2019 at 5:55 am
A horrifying issue brought to light where it needs to be so parents can stay ever vigilant. You built the story so well with the ending as a sucker punch. A tragic reality with permanent damage for far too many.
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January 14, 2019 at 5:27 pm
Yes, the long lasting effect are the worse for those who’ve experienced this horror.
Thank you, Brenda, for you favorable comment and visit.
Isadora 😎
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January 14, 2019 at 2:27 am
what a twist. it was an ending i didn’t expect.
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January 14, 2019 at 4:11 pm
It was the only way I could figure out how to add the despicable predator. Thank you … !!!
Isadora 😎
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January 13, 2019 at 6:42 pm
Powerful story, Isadora. Like many of the comments, you left me feeling rather sick at the end. Super story-telling, though. I was particularly impressed with the way you made it clear that Mrs Goodman knew what her husband was up to. “Mrs. Goodman cleaned her home and windows all the time; a cleaning cloth always in her hand.” Shades of Lady Macbeth!
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January 14, 2019 at 4:17 pm
Thank you, Penny for visiting, reading and favorably commenting on my story. I’m smiling from ear to ear.
Actually, I’m not sure if Mrs. Goodman knew what her husband was up to. But, you bring up a great point. One never knows … do one.
Isadora 😎
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January 13, 2019 at 5:15 pm
So well written Issy, but a bit too close to home for me. It brought horrible memories flooding back, although even after over six decades, they are always quite near the surface. I wonder if these despicable perpetrators realise just how devastatingly damaging their selfish and perverted actions are.
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January 14, 2019 at 4:21 pm
I’m sure the predators do not know or even care about the damage they cause. It’s a sick all-about-themselves mentality. I was thrilled when the #metoo movement was started. It brought to light other issues too. Sad …!!! Thank you for commenting so favorably about the very difficult subject. Have a wonderful week, Sylvia. Hope you’re enjoying our milder temps.
Isadora 😎
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January 13, 2019 at 1:36 pm
Querida Isadora,
Having been molested by fathers of two of my childhood playmates, this chilled me to the bone. Bien escrito come siempre, mi amiga.
Shalom y abrazos,
Rochelle
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January 13, 2019 at 3:32 pm
Querida Rochelle,
Lo siento mucho … que pena que te haya pasado. Es una tristeza. Espero que tu corazón haya curado de esa tragedia. Abrazos 🤗 😍
Es un cueto que me dijo una amiga cuando ya era mayor. Ella nunca dijo nada. Hasta este día sufre.
These predators don’t always have foreign faces. It’s the main reason children are lured by them. I hope more of them are exposed out of the shadows they lurk in.
Gracias y Abrazos, mi amiga 💕
Isadora 😎
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January 12, 2019 at 11:18 pm
That’s a disturbing twist, I didn’t see it coming either. Great writing of a horrible and difficult topic. They always were there, sadly.
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January 13, 2019 at 3:42 pm
Yes, sadly, predators were always amongst the innocent. I tried to soften the disgusting behavior because it’s only 100 words. I had to add the punch line to bring it out. I’m pleased you read my story. Thank You, Gaylearner. I appreciate your visit.
Isadora 😎
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January 12, 2019 at 8:33 pm
Christ, didn’t see that coming, that’s revolting. Which I guess was the aim, well done!!
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January 13, 2019 at 3:49 pm
Since there’s only 100 words are allowed I did a lot of editing. The ending had to be that way. I mainly wanted the disgusting behavior to come through. If you’re revolted, I hit m y mark. Thank you so much for your great comment and for visiting.
Isadora 😎
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January 13, 2019 at 4:27 pm
Yep really good stuff well done.
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January 12, 2019 at 7:51 pm
The creepiness of the candy jar. Well done!
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January 13, 2019 at 5:25 pm
Innocent children being taken advantage of by the creepy friends family or friends.
Thanks for popping by and commenting, aFrank.
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January 12, 2019 at 7:34 pm
Heartbreaking and chilling turn there at the end. Well written!
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January 13, 2019 at 3:50 pm
Thank you, Annie, for your very favorable comment. I appreciate it and your visit.
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January 12, 2019 at 4:03 pm
Well done, Isadora. This was chilling, after such a sweet start..
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January 13, 2019 at 5:31 pm
I had written it and then had to edit a great deal to get to the 100 words.
I was hoping the effect would still be there after I chopped off the extra words.
Glad you found it chilling as it’s a subject that lurks in the shadows.
Gracias y Merci, mi amiga
Isadora 😎
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January 13, 2019 at 5:45 pm
Ya done good. No worries!
Mon plaisir y de nada, amiga!
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January 13, 2019 at 5:51 pm
😍 👍 😎
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January 13, 2019 at 5:53 pm
😘
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January 12, 2019 at 2:44 pm
Makes me want to cut it off! Get rid of his horrible candy. Great story, Izzy!
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January 12, 2019 at 3:03 pm
YIKES … I had a bit of a chuckle though, PJ.
YUP … there is too much being said about predators now-a-days. I suppose they were always there but in the dark shadows. Thanks for coming by and commenting. Have a GREAT weekend … Izzy 😎
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January 13, 2019 at 2:52 pm
I hope you have a great weekend too, Izzy!
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January 13, 2019 at 3:23 pm
😍 😎
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January 12, 2019 at 1:19 pm
A lot more common than we know.
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January 12, 2019 at 3:05 pm
I believe these predators were always lurking in the shadows. It seems to be talked about more. Gilly, hope you have a relaxing weekend. Issy 😎
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January 12, 2019 at 12:40 pm
There’s nothing I can add to what’s been said by those before me, except to congratulate you on writing about such a sorrowful situation in such a sensitive way.
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January 12, 2019 at 3:08 pm
Fortunately, these predators are being taken out of the shadows where they hid for too long. Thanks you, Keith for your very favorable comment. Have a lovely weekend … Isadora 😎
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January 12, 2019 at 5:45 am
Oh that’s a disturbing twist. I didn’t see it coming. Well told.
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January 12, 2019 at 3:12 pm
It’ a sad thing happening too often. I’m pleased you found it was well told. The subject can be difficult to write without causing issues for some. Thank you … Isadora 😎
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January 12, 2019 at 4:47 am
That’s enough to put you off candy for life.
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January 12, 2019 at 3:13 pm
Hearing about incidences like this can be very disturbing. It’s a sensitive subject to write about. Thank you for commenting and visiting. Isadora 😎
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January 12, 2019 at 1:19 am
I have to go be sick now. Very effective writing Isadora.
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January 12, 2019 at 3:16 pm
I’m so sorry JoHawk. It’s a very disturbing subject. It happens often. I believe more are coming forward and that’s why we’re hearing about it. BUT … I’m pleased you found it to be effective writing. Thank You … Isadora 😎
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January 12, 2019 at 12:01 am
Really chilling, and told so dispassionately made it more effective
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January 12, 2019 at 1:09 am
Extremely complimentary comment, Neil.
I appreciate your experienced critique. Thank you 😊
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January 11, 2019 at 11:48 pm
That made me cringe. No wonder her friend didn’t take candy. Hope she made it out of there, out of his predatory ways.
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January 12, 2019 at 3:18 pm
I haven’t quite developed the entire story. It’s based on a childhood friend who confided in me in her own innocent way. She was 5 and never told. Predators lurk in the shadows. Creepy … !!!
Thank you for your great comment and for visiting. Isadora 😎
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January 11, 2019 at 10:29 pm
Terribly heartbreaking. You wrote it very well though.
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January 12, 2019 at 3:20 pm
Thank you, Lisarey. These creepy predators lurk in the shadows. Chidlren are so vulnerable. Glad you liked the way I wrote it.
Isadora 😎
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January 11, 2019 at 10:03 pm
Well done. This broke my heart. No one in our neighborhood was abused this way, no one beaten or abused. We were so happy and unaware of threats like this. Allowed to be a rumble tumble mass of legs and arms, shrieks and childhood competition. And to imagine a man would present his private parts as candy to a child (or anyone 😉 ) is icky. Thanks for the shivers. I mean that in a good way.
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January 12, 2019 at 3:24 pm
Yes, Alicia, it’s very sad. So many children are vulnerbale to predators like this. I lived in a neighborhood that had a million stories. Some were good and some were bad … this one, unfortunately, is a fictionalized tale of an incident a friend told me about as an adult. Glad you enjoyed it but sorry it broke your heart. Sending healing LOVE your way. Have a super weekend … Isadora 😎
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January 11, 2019 at 9:36 pm
Horrifying and more so when parents don’t believe their children. Well written.
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January 11, 2019 at 9:43 pm
Yes, parents need to believe their children. But, children need to tell their parents too. It’s sickening for sure. Thank you for commenting. Indira. I appreciate your visiting. Have a lovely weekend.
Isadora 😎
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January 11, 2019 at 10:37 pm
Thanks dear, a lovely weekend to you too.
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January 11, 2019 at 9:15 pm
This was a tale of a sickening man about to ruin a young girl’s life. Sadly, this happens more than we like to admit.
Well written.
Have a great weekend Isadora.
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January 11, 2019 at 9:40 pm
Yes, these predators are out there.
Sick and sickening …!!!
Thank you for reading and chiming in. I always appreciate it. You enjoy your wekend too.
Isadora 😎
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January 11, 2019 at 9:41 pm
Thanks
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