Inside the Mind of Isadora

Friday Fictioneers – The Carousel is Closed

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Mother was furious and mumbling to herself. She did that when she was angry.
She turned to PJ and me in the back seat.

“Did you hear what the man said? The carousel is closed. He didn’t say why.
An hours drive wasted. No griping or tears on the way home.”

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Good Evening – this is Audra Smith
Breaking News …
Two children found murdered at the Suffolk Park Carousel.
The light dust of snow preserved the bodies and evidence.
Police have a suspect in mind but no one’s been apprehended.

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Silent tears flowed down Mothers’ face as she hugged us tightly.

2015©isadora delavega

Genre: Fiction
Word Count: 100 Words

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Author: Inside the Mind of Isadora

Intriguing, sensitive, mysterious, loving, artistic and crackling with excitement for life is a pretty good description of who I am. I just retired from the world of art where I sold my Artfully Designed Handmade Jewelry for 28 years; although, art will always be a part of whom I am no matter what venue I choose to express it.

43 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – The Carousel is Closed

  1. Wow! Sad and gripping, all in one. Well done!

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  2. Close to danger and an escape. It was so fortunate they were’t also victims. No wonder the mother was overcome with emotion. Well written, IMI. ——- Suzanne

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  3. To my friend thank you for visiting my blog have a nice new week

    a big hug from Herluf.

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  4. Definitely a paradigm shift on this one! I think all mothers would find themselves feeling like this mother did…

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  5. Quite the range of emotions!

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  6. Love the idea of different scenes in so short a story. Truly effective writing, Izzy! 🙂

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  7. Great story, very poignant.

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  8. Recently I was over at the carousel by the San Diego Zoo. One of the information pamphlets there stated that there are more carousels in San Diego County than any other place in the world. Along with the Zoo carousel, there’s one at Safari Park and there are two located in two different malls. That’s four. Sadly, the pamphlet didn’t tell me how many so I shall continue to search for any others.

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    • We have a carousel in a mall in Bradenton, Florida. I was amazed when I saw it. It was a reminder of those wonderful times when I rode the carousel as a child. Unfortunately, my story had a little less joy in it.
      Thanks for stopping by and leaving your very interesting comment. ________ Isadora 😎

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  9. Wow! That’s quite a story and in so few words. Well done, Issy. 🙂

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  10. It is said every culprit leaves an evidence as so did this one. Hope he is booked.

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  11. I can imagine this too vividly, very well written Issy!

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  12. A powerful story about life and death. And the way fate intervenes.
    Well written!

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  13. Very chilling. To think that we had an almost brush with death, and that we were spared.

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    • I think the Mothers emotional reaction brought her bad day guilt to light. We all have them. She was overcome
      by the reality she heard on the news. Glad you enjoyed my story enough to leave a comment on your visit.
      Thank you ________ Isadora 😎

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  14. Wonderful story line – very powerful

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  15. Hola Isadora,

    A newscast like that has a way of reminding us what we have. One nitpick “an hour’s drive” you need an apostrophe.

    Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • Hola Rochelle,
      The apostrophe has been added. No problem on pointig it out. I am here to learn. Advice is always appreciated.
      Mothers have bad day’s. In the story, the mother is showcasing her guilt for having had that bad day.
      Thank you for visiting and commenting.
      Adios,
      Isadora 😎

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  16. Very nice! If I heard news like that from a place I was just about to take my kids, I would be hugging them tightly too. Great story!

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  17. I have written a song called The Carousel’ and how kids luv ’em,, great As kids we would have griped..

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  18. Nicely done. I think mother said no griping instead of gripping. 🙂

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